War Tyme(Rooby Diss) Needs Work
I'm going to take this opportunity to leave a real review. Rooby asked me to jump on a track with him, so I did, but I don't have any serious gripes with you as of yet.
Your lyrics are passable, but the peak and flatten out too much. What I mean by that is you'll have a couple good lines and then follow them with a bunch of weak ones with little impact and/or simple rhymes. They just seem like space fillers to fill out the song. You rhyme the word 'you' far too often in my opinion, you should try expanding your vocabulary a little bit.
You're delivery seems a little weak to me. You fall off beat too often, have you ever studied music at all? You need to learn how timing actually works. For instance, most of (if not all) the beats you use are made in 4:4 time. If you learn and understand that, flowing with the music becomes easier. Also, I hear you stutter and stop sometimes, almost like there is a comma in your rap where there shouldn't be.
You say that you aren't going to give real effort until you're 'moved', but that sounds like you making an excuse for doing a poor job. Perhaps if you shortened the song from nearly 8 minutes to 3 or 4, you could put more effort and polish things up a little, and it wouldn't take any extra time.
Now you can go ahead and rip this review up like I've seen a thousand times on this site, but just know that I'm not trying to be a dick right now, I'm just being honest and trying to lend a few pointers. Do with it what you will.
- S.cRath