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Needs Work

I'm going to take this opportunity to leave a real review. Rooby asked me to jump on a track with him, so I did, but I don't have any serious gripes with you as of yet.

Your lyrics are passable, but the peak and flatten out too much. What I mean by that is you'll have a couple good lines and then follow them with a bunch of weak ones with little impact and/or simple rhymes. They just seem like space fillers to fill out the song. You rhyme the word 'you' far too often in my opinion, you should try expanding your vocabulary a little bit.

You're delivery seems a little weak to me. You fall off beat too often, have you ever studied music at all? You need to learn how timing actually works. For instance, most of (if not all) the beats you use are made in 4:4 time. If you learn and understand that, flowing with the music becomes easier. Also, I hear you stutter and stop sometimes, almost like there is a comma in your rap where there shouldn't be.

You say that you aren't going to give real effort until you're 'moved', but that sounds like you making an excuse for doing a poor job. Perhaps if you shortened the song from nearly 8 minutes to 3 or 4, you could put more effort and polish things up a little, and it wouldn't take any extra time.

Now you can go ahead and rip this review up like I've seen a thousand times on this site, but just know that I'm not trying to be a dick right now, I'm just being honest and trying to lend a few pointers. Do with it what you will.

- S.cRath

Broken-Needle responds:

sir I always I appreciate constructive critiscism and when one has a point the last thing I'm gonna do is rip on them, but honestly I've asked people to listen to your friend but they simply can't he simply sounds annoying, so to honestly put effort and write lines like I did for "Black rob" is honestly a waste of time if this kid is just gonna come back with oh im gonna shoot you with my smith and weson .22 .303 like honestly how can you tell me my lyrics r passable when his are fail. although thanks 4 the review, oh and wut you mena with the 4:4 time thing cuz no I've never had music classes
Keep it pimpin'
BN out

Whaddup Robby

I don't know if it's just me, but this song sounds fucking bomb. Honestly, with some better quality equipment, I'd call this radio quality. Definately your best work to date in my opinion. Fuckin' good job on the chorus too, seriously. Downloaded and put on the ipod.

RoobyKillAll responds:

Thanks man, Steppin' my game a little. I gotta work on the lyrics a bit though. I really like how I sang the chorus here. Chchchyeah.

HAHAHA

HAHAHA

I can't believe how bad you are. It's actually really, really funny. What on earth would make you upload a song like this? Seriously, just listen to yourself. Why don't you let someone other than Lejin or his fanboys listen to this and see what they say.

And by the way, good luck asking the Bloods and Crips for clips. I'm sure they'll just hand them over to a preteen white kid who rhymes like this.

Broken-Needle responds:

lmfao, indeed

Nice.

Real hot track man, keep up the good work.

Sick Shit

This beat is fuckin' ill. I love freestylin' over this. Straight to the ipod, haha. 5/5, 10/10. Stay Up.

Definately Improving.

Whaddup Rooby. I see you're startin' to feel your way around FL more and more as time goes by. This beat is tight, waitin' for the lyrics now. Gotta start cluing into these inside jokes more though. Don't know who the fuck Mr Guul's supposed to be, haha.

RoobyKillAll responds:

Mr.Guul is a fictional character who wears a white plastic bag on his head all the time, and the only thing he can say is "GUUUUUUL!" lol, that's pretty much it. There's moire but I'd have to write a book about it. Thanks for the tight review bro. I'm feelin' the FL ch ch chyeah

Sick Shit

This is some sick shit man. Some of the most professional stuff I've heard on NG as of yet. Slick, smooth beat, and real hot flow from ya man Phade.

There comes a time in every man's life when he must travel to iceland and make guacamole for his father's cousin's nephew. And for me, that time has come. Unfortunately, I went to Spain and made tzatziki sauce for my mother's aunt's brother. Ah well.

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